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The Longest Wait (Revised) (Free verse) by Caducus

A plastic tube in oval claret, Your fate lays in a monotone beep. A green line flickers, and hopes rest in uncertain waves, that have become your bedside beacon. I sing your favourite love song, hoping that you'll hear me, sometimes I forget the words, then realize I've just sang them subconsciously. As you flounder in pale shade, I scowl at the vibrant bouquets, that flourish in your decline, as fates cruel hand awaits its Croupier. Fate is a horizontal line, The illuminated split of jade upon black, Time is recorded by impervious staff, Who destroy the remnants of her in sheets, The bed is made for another, And I leave silently to silence.

poetandknowit 5-Aug-03/9:41 PM
But Z, can't you hear the Sound of Silence behind this. Come on now, everybody try it. Read the first line and then start singing the song.

Okay go:
A plastic tube in oval claret
"Hello darkness my old friend"
Your fate lays in a monotone beep.
"I've come to talk with you again.

But read Cads lines in a T.S. voice. It works. It is genius.




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