LuckyJoe4 Aug 2003

Loving the vocab sounded like some of my own work. Didn't see any repeating words where something else could have said the same thing. (I hate poems that use the same word to describe something over and over) It was very good... but I had a few spots I had to read over because it didn't quite flow.
"fallen into shadow" end of line seven should be "fallen into shadows"
Here is a 9 keep up the good work and keep the pen on the paper flowing out languages unknown :)