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Long Journey (Free verse) by libby_28

You’ve pushed me into this slumber of sadness: Down this bitter road to loneliness, Only for one day to be blindsided. Body thrown about as a rag doll, Shards of glass entering my skin, Pain, but only for a short time. Blood on the pavement, my mind elsewhere, This is something I wasn't ready for. It will take years to let go. Wounds will heal in time, Only to reveal scars to last forever. These are my bitter memories of you.

richa 29-Jul-03/8:58 AM
a bit prosaic and cliched.

'Blood on the pavement my mind elsewhere' I like though distant and irreverent




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