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Xmas gifts list (Other) by lunar

For him: 1)Wings. So he can be free from the tormment of his thoughts. 2)A key. So he can unlock the cage of his mind. 3)Love. So he will not suffer anymore. For her: 1) A map. So she knows which route she will take next. 2) A tongue. So she can speak what is in her mind. 3) Hope. So she knows these feelings are not in vain.

deep-as-a-puddle 28-Jul-03/3:02 PM
fake, originality is nothing if it dosent come from the heart and this sounds as if you have tried to use metaphors cleaverly instead of speaking what you treuly feel...therefore the poem is to impress rather than to express your emotion? pah what do i know!




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