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Middleman (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

I want her. She with her dirty feet that tell stories of america and vast uninhabited fields of sage, and hips ever greening And they roll and undulate to the whispered breeze under blue skies I cannot allow this this potential this disaster in triplicate I already have dirty feet I'm already trampling these fields with my own.

INTRANSIT 28-Jul-03/6:45 AM
I trimmed some fat. I had to keep "whispered" it has specific value as it is about real people. wanting what you cant have. Ihave dirty feet too. we all do.




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