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Upon a falling star (new/changed) (Lyric) by LuckyJoe

And how many times must I wish upon a falling star Wondering why you've gone so far away And I'm here wish for another day Tell me why you've gone so far away Baby please, there has to be a better way Come back and hold me for a day. Tell me now all the things you wish to say. And how many times must I wish upon a falling star. Wonder why you've gone so far away And I'm still stuck, wishing Wishing for another day and a better way Baby please tell me you hear all these things I say Can't keep going on wishing for another day. And how many times must I wish upon a falling star Wonder why you've gone so far away So tell me now, are you gone for good Baby please don't keep me waiting, come on home to stay. Cause I can't keep on waiting for another day Come on home and hold me for the day Tell me now all the things you wish to say. And how many times must I wish upon a falling star Wonder why you've gone so far away Tell me now are my days wishing just wasting Can't keep waiting for you to hold me another day Baby please understand all these things I say Cause tomorrow I might not be wishing for another day ************************** Heavy crit please. I've made quite a few changes want to know if it helped any. Thanks.

Druid_Girl_1984 24-Jul-03/10:10 PM
I guess many have a set mind in what poetry should be eh? lol. I laugh at all the pathetic fools who think poetry should be a certain way. Poetry is a expression of one's heart and soul. Of course that is just my thought. here is a ten QT. = )




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