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Dear Lord (Sonnet) by simone_girard

Dear lord please hear my prey tonight For my husbands had a terrible fright His dear old mother's taken ill And this is a void I cannot fill She's suffered now for years and years And their has been so many tears But none of these were out of joy And my husband's gone from man to boy If she should die this family becomes half And it'll be a long time before we laugh So please dear lord take away her pain So we can see her smile again For her place can be filled by no other For this place in our hearts is for our dear mother And now in you I place my trust and love In you dear lord in heaven above.

StuntHornist 21-Jul-03/8:47 PM
Dear Lord, please hear my prayer tonight,
For my husband has had a terrible fright.
His dear old mother has taken ill
And this is a void I cannot fill.
She's suffered now for years and years
And there have been so many tears,
But none of these were out of joy
And my husband's gone from a man to a boy.
If she should die this family would be halved
And it would be a long time before we laughed.
So please, dear Lord, take away her pain,
So we can see her smile again,
For her place can be filled by no other,
For this place in our hearts is for our dear mother.
Now, in you, I place my trust and love,
In you, dear Lord, in heaven above.

There? Are you happy? It's the same poem, only grammatically correct, and it STILL sucks.




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