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smile (Free verse) by nolan

i write the way i feel i can't tell it to your eyes i talk to a screen the emotion in your eyes scares me i am scared you aren't scary, but i think i am i think my mind is my only friend i am bitter life sucks i should be able to control mine i am confused because it is late i don't know where you are i am here alone scared there is something special in the air i kill it all as i turn on the tv i am a mindless creature i don't care i don't care i did once and was hurt i am hurt you didn't care i am left at the starting and end of a vicous circle circles are strange i like strange it is different i like differences because i am i am as you want me to be i feel with every word i shake with every hit i fight to live i live i am scared of the unknown tomorrow is the unknown aswell i am strong i still care i care as i feel the tears run down my eyes when i think of you when i think of people people talking people smiling i smile smilies are all i have

Birdpia 19-Jul-03/8:25 AM
in your line sixth, there's a typo "sacry" ? and erm, 'zombie' in this touching poem breaks the poem :/ but i like your wording, it makes people touching in some part.. i give you 7




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