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Standards (Free verse) by skaskowski

The world shatters... And my space is invaded, i worry about being underrated in comparison to the rest of our society When exposed to dilemma I start to melt Like wax in camera light For all to see To be judged by crudest societies. How many bowls of beans did you eat last week? Did their nutritional value Suffice To end the hunger pangs That add or drain Relief? I worry about my social standing This world is far too demandifying Since Defying senses Is the key to gaining points. So i trade my points For cheap souveniers The pyramids of Giza? I got one already The sticker on the bottom says "Made in China". Looking at the clock I can see i only have Eight more minutes to make An appointment With whom? I don't remember, but she has minty breath And a smile that pierces... was that Beth? Or was it a guy... Tim, yeah that's him And you wonder why I'm lost in a dream half the time. Does this suffice your standards? Rank me, give me points... I'll purchase self-esteem with them And nail it to my wall. Self indulgent...yet Abstract...yet Wholistic?...yet Hmm... Yes.

baltimorejay 22-Jul-02/9:56 AM
Good poem - but somehow not all it could have been.




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