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Cold Spiral (Free verse) by emeraldskies

Frigid sleekness gripped Between white enamel rows The steel grits into my teeth Bringing a touching pain I haven't felt in a long time Why have I started now, When I know all is lost? The knife in my mouth Is like the gun in my hand... Aching to get on with it. The END... What longing and beauty Of a maroon redness Unparalelled by serenity, Spawned from insanity. The remnants of my mind Are lost upon me finally... I take the steel blade, Working it naturally, easily... Then the gun finishes it As I slide to the floor.

OneFingerAnswer 9-Jul-03/2:18 AM
Dude, take him up on this. He helped me before and it's worth it. Plus he's a hottie. :o

I'm kidding about the hottie thing but really he's what you want. Someone who knows what they're talking about and won't bull shit you about it. He's not hampered by styles or subject matter either. He and I don't write anything alike most of the time and he still did a great job.




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