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Forsaken Faults (Free verse) by DeadtotheWorld

The struggling scientist calculating in his lab Not realizing what a great life he has had Not knowing what to do next The scientist stays up from midnight to eight Not knowing what he just did that’s great He has just cured cancer and he’s not going to stop He has just realized theirs a formula he has to drop To make the solution of world hunger a reality Then the lonely bum on the street wakes up He now know this will never happen, it was just a dream

DreamerSupreme 29-Jun-03/11:18 PM
hrmm.. first we start with the scientist and then suddenly its a bum... I dont really know what to say.. _shrug_ Had an interesting beginning, but it ended sharply and left me slightly jangled.




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