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The Contract (2nd draft) (Free verse) by scitz

Love is the asterisk, Blotted in bold next to the small print, Love is force majeure, the lack of gravity that makes you sink. It's a contract, There is no going back, Sign upon the dotted line, 'X' marks the spot where you will be mine. Love is the blemish of a hopeless romantic, That blows us off course as we await intransit, Its as dubious as religion, We believe in fate, Like we believe a politician. Love is the discarded remnants of our insecurity, If love is truly blind, Then I believe there's more to see, more to find, and i leave behind, Infinity

god'swife 17-Jun-03/7:16 PM
Ok, well the first 4 lines show some promise, but then your lack of gravity makes people sink? What fucking universe are you from? Yuo lose it after that. It's all blah blah blee blee blue. Love is a blemish that blows you of course? And what's up with this WE business? It's you brother, you're going stagnantly on about. Lines 15 & 16 are the epitome of stupidity.




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