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Reflection on time, a day in a life The ease and joy, the absence of strife A lull in the storm, the soul calm and still Impervious to pain imposed without will. The heart feels so light, like soft wind in the trees A harmonious companion, like feathers on the breeze The grace of this moment, the gift of this time An experience of freedom, the feeling? - sublime.

Mway 18-Jul-02/5:27 PM
Anything that uses rhyming couplets gets a zero. It comes over as anodyne and banal - the sort of thing that one expects to find in 'The People's Friend' (For those who don't know, 'The Peoples Friend' is a magazine which has been published in Britain for many years, the contents of which are aimed at a readership of nice old ladies.)




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