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My girl (Sonnet) by simone_girard

Tynesha you are my special girl Your precious and beautiful like a pearl I'm your mummy and I love you true The apple of my eye that is you To feel you growing inside of me Was the best feeling that could ever be You were given my eyes and my nose But not my ears, thank god not those You were blessed with the most beautiful smile And to see it made sleepless nights worthwhile I was so happy to hear you talk I almost cried when I saw you walk Cause your babyhood slips by so fast And pretty soon it will be past But you were born to me because of love And each day I'll thank the lord above.

bondjedi 7-Jun-03/5:20 AM
I can't wait to read the published version in the next issue of "Poems Written By and For Retards Monthly". Seriously, this is execrable. It sounds like it was written by a pioneer lady on the Oregon Trail who had her child kidnapped by an Apache war party. You get a four and you're lucky to get that.




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