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Dear Lord (Sonnet) by simone_girard

Dear lord please hear my prey tonight For my husbands had a terrible fright His dear old mother's taken ill And this is a void I cannot fill She's suffered now for years and years And their has been so many tears But none of these were out of joy And my husband's gone from man to boy If she should die this family becomes half And it'll be a long time before we laugh So please dear lord take away her pain So we can see her smile again For her place can be filled by no other For this place in our hearts is for our dear mother And now in you I place my trust and love In you dear lord in heaven above.

simone_girard 22-May-03/8:20 PM
If there is something wrong with every line, please feel free to give me an example of how this should have been written. Up until having my poetry posted on this sight I have only ever had one or two bad comments in regards to my writting. I am always open to suggestions from those of you who are perfect writers, who have had at least 1 book published, and those of you who wish to tell me how to right my feelings and thoughts.




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