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stamp (Senryu) by Adriaan

The void inside me an impression left by you I can not fill it

Red_is_life 16-Jul-02/2:09 AM
The last line could be changed to get across a bigger sense of loss, at the moment it doesnt covey a deep sense of pain. Really good though first two lines really work.




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