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We be free (Free verse) by blurryphotograph

We be infinity neverending ever-evolving creating dissapating.. We be waiting to be discovered. We be blitzkriegin' our ideas to naive brainwashed and whitewashed ears gettin the word out there.. We be tryin' oh yes, we be tryin, we be reachin.. We be drummin we be dancin we be philosophizin we be poeticizin we be expressing! We be creating a melody that reverberates from yesterday to tomorrow.!.. So many voices with so many words unwilling to listen but wanting to be heard.. We be listenin'. But you be silent. You be numb. You be closin your eyes at the climax. We be the rhythm we be the motion we be the heartbeat of this revolution.. We be watchin as the pyramids burn We be watchin the flames engulf idols of heathen gods.. in your eyes. We be watchin as you be destroyin.. We be seein the history the culture the life-- that you burn. --like paper it burns and you be blind to the fire and you be deaf to the songs of the ages We be the fire we be the ashes we be the truth in a land full of lies we be the pheonix and we will rise. We be scribblin our constitution our manifesto our struggle this is OUR graffitism on the blank walls of our destiny We be re writin history we be the legacy.. We be free, you and me.. We be free.

Jeremi B. Handrinos 4-May-03/7:23 PM
"as the pyramids burn" Be smart, change this to librarys, because of the obvious, that being the impossibilty of burning stone, ever. And definitrly add more commas and fix Phoenix immediately. Because that is one of those mispells that can't slide by, ever.




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