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Regrets (Lyric) by Mikius

My time has come I lie in bed The sharpened scythe, I'm all but dead My life is spent My days are through Winter comes To life renew As I part I leave regrets I wish I'd lived, Not hedged my bets I loved you once so long ago But now, just darkness and I must go As I part My final say, Live your life and love the day For I wasted mine On a silent glance Listen now You still have a chance

Ranger 29-Apr-03/10:38 AM
Here's how it is: I like the content very much, but the timing is dodgy in places. For example change line 10 to simply 'leaving regrets', have a look through it and you will see what needs reducing. I expect you will reedit this one too so shall save my vote for the time being.




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