poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Death Of A Rose (New draft) by Mr Pig.

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.27 Apr 2003

Great use of the word "Like". Sometimes a metaphor can be too strong, can't it? May I suggest:

DETH-ROSE

Petals fall like bricks;
piloted by vicious prawnes,
they land on my face.