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Death Of A Rose (New draft) (Haiku) by Mr Pig

Petals fall like tears, The arid earth is washed In beautiful blood.

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 27-Apr-03/3:20 AM
Great use of the word "Like". Sometimes a metaphor can be too strong, can't it? May I suggest:

DETH-ROSE

Petals fall like bricks;
piloted by vicious prawnes,
they land on my face.




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