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Death Of A Rose (New draft) (Haiku) by Mr Pig

Petals fall like tears, The arid earth is washed In beautiful blood.

richa 26-Apr-03/10:12 AM
yes I would change lacerated too, it just seems out of place.
Overall though very delicate and in the spirit of haiku(if not quite the syllable count)




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