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Only in humility (Free verse) by mozac

Only in humility Can there be love How I yearn to be without me to be prideless in humility There can be no rhythm on a shallow surface no sound on a wavering string Watch, how i move my eyes restless unfocused These sights around me in the picture - unpainted on a mirrored canvas Streaks of colors reds and whites with a broken brush Can you not sense my reminence my apology to you to myself

Amelia 23-Apr-03/7:54 AM
I don't mean to sound dumb but where exactly are you going with the poem? and are you trying to say Reminiscence or eminence in the third line from the last? I don't think reminence is correct.




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