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My Blues (Lyric) by thepinkbunnyofdoom

Lost in maze Staring thru the midnight haze No clue where I am Feel like the world doesn't give a damn The blues seeping thru my window Filling me with sorrow Seems that every night it rains With that same sad refrain You ain't going nowhere Don't nobody care So I lit up myself and a square Say to God are you there? Lady lucks using me once again Playing my heart strings like a mandolin Bleed thru the pain Images smack thru my brain The fire in my eyes Once again I watch as it dies And stars that surround my skull Get crushed by the ant’s mandible So I’ll sing once again That sad sad refrain You aint going nowhere Don’t know body care No you ain't going nowhere Don’t no body care

thepinkbunnyofdoom 21-Apr-03/7:11 PM
Umm... Well for starters thanks for the advice. I'm not female tho and This was just free versing ryhme with no focus. I'm glad you think I have potential!!
:)




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