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downtown bus (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub

snow unfolding in ashen window's reversal, the scourges of campus conspiring, with lurid smiles. cellphones cry like infants, cradled. single thin tones abandoned in the snow, and the U-girls get off at some club, tight glitterbright shirts over shoulders, healthy eeks of recognition and my scarf hides parched lips. now all I see is the relief map on the back of an old man's neck.

Another Bobjim?!?! 10-Apr-03/9:29 AM
I can live with settle, but the un-origional trolls who follow him around to try to get some sort of a sad life are too much.

Nice poem Bill, but didn't really connect with me, so I won't vote on it. Listen to the suggestions and re-post it later.




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