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and i don't even care (Free verse) by nolan

another mad man comes breaking through from so far under it was gone away from your connectable forces you need relief and comfort but i need passion and awe once again my heart takes the fall being alone isn't that bad when it is all you have ever had and i don't even care i can't lie to you it just hurts to know the wonderful thing has blown in the wind not ever finding a home we will never know the breeze never taste the rain we'll never hear the sun never touch the wind i will never witness those eyes be ignorant to all i desire as you are killing my fire

<~> 8-Apr-03/8:03 AM
and never write another cliche?

sorry, that was harsh. i do like this piece, but it stands on the other side of over-used metaphor right now. you need to channel this, and make it more personal. reinvent the wheel. make the black bird green.




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