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Lossing Grip (Lyric) by Katie2

Time slips through my fingertips My love for life is running thin The river of my tears, Is going dry My suicidal dreams, I’ve learned to live by (chorus) Ohh, Now I lay be down to sleep Lord please forgive me, for this deed, But the knife of my fears took hold, Tilted on my wrist till my body went cold Jumping into the clouds, Falling to the ground, Landing on my feet, Freedom from this pain is what I seek. You said you didn’t care, So I through my hands in the air, I’m dong with fighting, I’m done with pain, I’m done with all this shit that drives me insane. As the blade touches my skin, I pray to go once again. (chorus) I see the light, blinding. Finally my soul is free, Walking toward my dreams, Eternity, in your arms, My first choice wasn't wrong (2x chorus) ehhh it's my first TRY lol :P

Katie2 2-Apr-03/9:00 AM
LoL, I won't venture off and talk about poetandknowit, lol, but thankz for your comment, and I know I need to revise it, and when I get a chance I"m going to see if I can find a site that shows how a lyric should all be set up so I can work on this one more, and fix it up. My next adventure is going to try to write a Haiku (if that is how you spell it) but we'll see, I think it's kinda funny yet 'educational' to try new things like that :P But thanx agian Caducus and good luck with things :)




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