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She moves
(
Free verse
) by
Oddsboy
She moves like dark rainwater, like slick ink she moves. like alley???s twisting, churning burning down my mind she slides. Storm clouds gather dance and howl
Jill Stockinger
14-Jul-02/3:02 PM
I liked the first 4 lines only.
Rest did not hang together well
enough.
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