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She moves (Free verse) by Oddsboy

She moves like dark rainwater, like slick ink she moves. like alley???s twisting, churning burning down my mind she slides. Storm clouds gather dance and howl

Jill Stockinger 14-Jul-02/3:02 PM
I liked the first 4 lines only.
Rest did not hang together well
enough.




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