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Relentless (Free verse) by GekoHawaii

Two constants in my life On Opposite ends of a spinning magnet Two distant extremes Weaving in and out of my view Quickly Changing Always moving Never letting me adjust I reach out to chance the present But my hand is struck down By an invisible foe I cannot stop this cycle For these constants shall forever Torment my soul I do not stand alone in this Others experience these demons Many cherish one Many embrace the other Yet both exist as opposites And shall always Be a curse to me

Blindproject217 22-Mar-03/6:03 PM
I like how you spaced the lines to make them seem opposite, what would have been cooler is if you had made this poem as an argument with yourself and had each line opposing the one before. I still like it though, 8




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