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Anger Management (Free verse) by wlshepherd

Sometimes when I get angry I just feel really mad And I hate everyone And I dont want to talk to anyone. Een though I shout at them, People sometimes still talk to me And sometimes it makes me feel worse, But sometimes it makes me feel better. Like if they say something that makes me laugh, Or remember something good, Or if what they say Puts what I am mad about in a perspective, Where I see that it itsn't so important That I shout at people.

Jill Stockinger 14-Jul-02/2:37 PM
Seems pretty obvious- but you are "telling" not showing, which does
not make it very good poetry. Clear thought though.




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