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Too Much (Lyric) by intheailse

I wish i could run and hide away, leave behind these lonesome days, all these faces have no name, by myself I'll fade away. All the weight of all my fears, I don't think my shoulders can take, I've had enough of this feeling, but these thoughts I cannot shake. Hoping and dreaming that's all I do, living for a life I hope will come true, here as I stand all I do is wait, but tell me, my friend, what else can I do. Everyday my head rolls up and around, seconds pass from a smile to a frown, my head and heart are swimming now, but tell me, my love, am I going to drown? It's too much, too much too take.

thepinkbunnyofdoom 21-Mar-03/12:41 PM
I like the ryhme scheme. Plus the flow of the words isn't that bad. Fairly good. -7-




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