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Taller Girl (Free verse) by lastobelus

Taller Girl whirled her skirt in segregated circles, drawing boundaries around her with it with her hair twirled out in black circles and her arms flung out that skirt coming up.up. towards them, wooshing out and drawing her space unusually wide as she was unusually tall as if she would somehow.turtle.down in it. 1.one drum and a guitar and then another and under.guitar.drum.thunder. her circling hair, her face comes cover comes turning under that silk flung black.Once.coming around and the hair flying up (I saw) turtled brows and closed blacklined eyes, mouth turned down in (studied) Oblivion.but the other.drum.come- ing around had an opened eye, (the) red lips turning up under the flying glimpse of hair so I saw that she saw that I saw her.drum. Then went whirling away into the center .drum.thump.un.til I saw only the tips of her hair flying over the heads of.all.the.(drum).others and heard her stamping boots.

Tibbs 20-Mar-03/12:05 PM
this would be my edit:

taller girl whirled her skirt
in segregated circles
drawing boundaries all around her with it,
while her hair lashed out in little black laraits
and, her long arms aloft,
that skirt floated up towards them,
wooshing out and drawing her space unusually wide,
as she was unusually tall
as if she could eclipse herself in it

one drum and one guitar
and then another
and under
her circling hair, her face comes,
cover comes under that silken black
and once more coming ?round
with her hair flying up
I saw furled brows and closed, black-lined eyes
and a mouth turned down in studied oblivion;
but another coming around
had an opened eye and red upturned lips
under the flying glimpse of hair,
so that I saw that she saw
that I saw her,

and then she whirled away
into the center
until I saw only the fringe of her hair
flying over the heads of all the others,
and my moment, crushed
under her stamping boots





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