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The lightest touch (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

Wispy swirling white. Flashing ruby fright. Spinning, sliding away as additions enter the fray. Many pass in the night wispy and swirling white.

Caducus 13-Mar-03/2:59 PM
Sounds like the ocean, love it !
By the way that Saturn ring thing you wrote for your wife....it partly inspired me to write one i posted today, like your true comment...'bloody war of angels',

think you need to work on last line, its okay but you dont do okay you do bravo. 7




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