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Currents (Free verse) by Isis

Drawn in to a deep of tear, Struggling, I die. Execute by yielding, My oppressor is the sky The fiendish sun Throws waves of bright, Vertically down into the depths. Dark and light, adjacent stand Shadows glance, and terrify, Bind me to my fate.

pkdrunner 12-Jul-02/7:01 PM
Isis, the last 7 lines are wonderful! The first line "a deep of tear"? is odd, and struggling and yielding may be what you want to say, but it is not apparent why opposites are in consecutive lines. Overall very good work, I love the imagery of the dark and light, it brings up an image of jail bars. Thanks!




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