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Stand in line for nothingness (Free verse) by Crakyamuni

Sometimes worlds are born in a pure instant of the drop of a shield those words we wield in pain make sane what never became or could ever become for some there can only be the love of life through the 90 degree reverie Learning how to be comfort through reckless banter lit with divinity that can only exist in this you and me sadly I see the shallow mess that has dictated these words and guess you might never have even considered this I find it limitless like an ocean of sadness driven to joy through madness only you and I could visually bear we have the same molecular structures in the dust of our hair- It's beauty like yours that can let minds soar it is beauty like yours that will lead into the air

LeBlanc 10-Mar-03/4:06 PM
Break it up and shorten it. That would give it more of a punch.




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