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Mebi (Free verse) by ==Doylum

Your spirit is as light as a floaty thing you are lovelier than a thing that is lovely your eyes are as sparkly as something what sparkles alot and your smile is as turny uppy as a pair of chinos but not as yellow your hair is as yellow as very yellow corn cept when you dye it when its as black as a very black night like when the stars arn't out You nose is retruse like a twinkly stars arms but not as pointy your aunty makes nice cakes your skin is a soft as a very soft material perhaps velvet but not as furry and not purple like most velvet is your bottom is pert like a puppy but not one of those pug dog ones I like your legs as well Your fingers are like dead nice and not fat like fat sausage fingers what some girls have and your hands are wee just like a really wee lovely pretty thing Your breasts are quite small but i quite like small breasts Big ones get in the way like lots of pastry on the outside of a custard slice My poem is gooder than a goodboy what has done well at scholl I like you like somebody who likes donuts a lot

lastobelus 9-Mar-03/3:46 PM
delightful...
I love line 7, "twinkly stars arms"
I think the last line could have more oomph, because I read bukowski too much and have this last-line thing




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