Ranger9 Mar 2003

Too simplistic to get anywhere on this site-revise it and be a bit more creative with your vocab. Also decide whether you want to rhyme it or not because this just doesn't flow. That being said, I like the line "Just keep me posted on who you're fucking"...not heard that one before. Oh, and please change the title.
There we go, there's a comment with critique, hope it was of some use. Let me know when you've edited this and I'll have amother look. Good Evening to you all.