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Steel Wire Frame (Free verse) by celiff

My heart is merely a cage, For everything I wish to jail there. Some of its prisoners will never leave for they are content; While I pray that some never escape to face me. Safely, my God stays there protected for the outside world, Protecting me because I know he is always there. While commonly my sympathy escapes and runs freely- To freely for some who might call me overly sentimental. My courage, is not what it should be Because I have never been able to gather it all... Yet. Captured!, is the rage of a teen in anguish, which has resided there for far too long But I can't deal with it now, Even though my heart is hindered by it so.. And in the corner is a lavished cell Always kept ready, For the day I may capture love. My heart is merely a cage, In simpler terms A steel wire frame Battered and bruised,from the world I live in, and all it's pain, But is not yet broken, Because it is held together by the strength of hope.

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 5-Mar-03/9:35 PM
What have I become? I can't even say a mean thing about this poem because I think Settle probably wrote it. Settle probably writes half the overwrought bullshit on poemranker.

HAVING SAID THAT, HERE ARE SOME MISTAKES THAT YOU MADE.

1. Your heart is not a cage. It is a pump.

2. God is not protected. The idea of God being protected is a contradiction, since it implies that He could be in danger.

3. "To freely" is wrong.

4. Putting a comma after "My courage" is wrong.

5. Putting a comma after a motherfucking exclamation point is wrong.

6. Shut the fuck up.

7. It's "its", not "it's".

Thanks for your time! Your poem is awful.




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