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Extra Strength Tylenol (Free verse) by DurtKL

Acetaminophen, The active ingredient in Extra Strength Tylenol, Is a pain reliever. Uses are listed as Temporary relief for Minor aches and pains Resulting from Headaches, arthritis, Toothaches, the common cold, Menstrual cramps, and etcetera. Her symptoms a broken heart, overflowing tears, And heavy breathing. Yet, None of these were Listed on the label. So, I wondered why She downed the whole bottle.

<~> 4-Mar-03/11:02 AM
you need a colon or the word "were" after "Her symptoms"; i'd recommend the colon, and deleting "Yet," and "So," to tighten it.




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