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Death Of Day ( re-edit)
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Mr Pig
Dusk came, Sun bled coagulating the clouds. Silver assassin appeared.
Ranger
1-Mar-03/3:28 AM
Possibly 'Silver assassin struck' for the last line, it seems to work and would take the syllables down to 17? I really like your haikus, you have much ability with images. 9
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