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I'll love you Heather, for ever and ever (Free verse) by TanHand

Today at school I tripped I did I hit my noggin on a boy named Sid He said that soon he'd make me pay After school he did in a terrible way THIS IS WHY I BEAT YOUR DUMB ANOREXIC BITCH FACE DOWN ALL AROUND THE KITCHEN LIKE A WILY FLY In the afternoon I played in the park With Wally and Joe and on a lark They pushed me into old man Emerson's yard Why couldn't we push Joey? (He's a retard) THIS IS WHY I BEAT THE SHIT OUT OF THAT FAGGOT BROTHER OF YOURS WITH A ROLL OF QUARTERS IN MY FIST Late at night as you tucked me in You told me I should pray for my sins I confessed them all and when I got to the third I got the impression that nobody heard THIS IS WHY I KILLED YOUR FATHER BY STEALING HIS MEDICINE TO COLLECT THE LIFE INSURANCE. YOUR MOM IS NEXT.

god'swife 24-Feb-03/8:28 PM
Lovely, freshly laundered sheets lovely
New socks lovely
The smell of burning dust from turning on the furnace for the first time this year lovely. Couplet after S2 needs rewriting. Doesn't jive with feel of poem.





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