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Goodbye Daddy (Other) by NewbieMe

I love you daddy, as I tried to be composed Be strong for me daddy, as I see him gasps for air I'm here for you daddy, as I watch him on his bed Please try harder daddy, as I wipe the sweat off his forehead Say something daddy, as I see his eyes close Don't leave me daddy, as I feel his hand grow cold I'll miss you daddy, as I see him drift away Be happy where you are daddy, I'll never forget this day

thepinkbunnyofdoom 22-Feb-03/9:14 AM
Hmmm... I like the way this sorta moves you but the language seems just a little forced. -8-




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