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Resurrection (for Gods Wife) (Haiku) by Mr Pig

Stigmata skies, Jesus bleeds for forty nights. Judas Shelters.

god'swife 20-Feb-03/2:56 PM
The forty nights were spent in the desert months before the resurrection. Again the title doesn't jive for me. I think the haiku works very well intil the last line. Too preachy. Tell me something nuetral at the end, to give the blood more power.




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