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Death Of Day ( re-edit) (Haiku) by Mr Pig

Dusk came, Sun bled coagulating the clouds. Silver assassin appeared.

god'swife 20-Feb-03/1:19 AM
Change the tense of the last line. Somehow "appears" works for this. Some new pressent beginning.Death of day, and then a moon right now.




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