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Death Of Day ( re-edit)
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Mr Pig
Dusk came, Sun bled coagulating the clouds. Silver assassin appeared.
god'swife
17-Feb-03/11:09 PM
Very good, but the tense is mixed up. It's either 'comes' or 'Sun bled........silver assasin appeared".
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