Replying to a comment on:

For my wife (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

She holds me like a soft summer breeze and kisses me with a doves wing. And when we make love we hold hands and become a placid pool.

nentwined 17-Feb-03/9:04 PM
I think I would have liked hammock better (netted swing is poetic, but I didn't get it).

this is simple and short, densely packed with common images, but... the collage is almost poignant. leans towards trite. maybe just the "ing ing ing".




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001