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Death Of Day ( re-edit) (Haiku) by Mr Pig

Dusk came, Sun bled coagulating the clouds. Silver assassin appeared.

Shardik 16-Feb-03/11:52 AM
Decent, but why do i keep counting eighteen? You know when i was younger i lived on the island of Kauai. I saw a pig roast. Many beautiful sunsets. I watched them kill the pig. I have never heard a sound come out of any living thing even similiar. Have you heard that sound? I'll wait to vote for your assesment of the structure.




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