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His Dying Words (2nd draft) (Free verse) by Ranger

Time slowed, and for an instant it seemed Forever, he was granted The eternity he required To explain how much more he wished he'd loved her And within a fraction of a cricket's song His final breath floated away With the wonderful words she longed for As they dissipated into the echoes Of a deserted corridor "I love you too", she wept But her child would never know Just how much so Condolences and cards rang hollow The maternity ward faded to silence

Ranger 16-Feb-03/6:54 AM
Thanks Cad, I'll have a look about for the names given to destructive winds and I'll edit this in a few days or so because this is (as it says) a draft. I never actually thought of 4 winds, thank you for the idea.
Ta.




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