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Foolish (Free verse) by AmberNicole

Falling in love with you Was not something I wanted to do I should have known to stay away And told that little girl not to play. I should have known that men like you Would only break my heart in two That men like you were uncapable of Expressing anything to do with love. Like a snake, you stole my love And made me believe you were sent from above. Then you laughed at my trusting ways And said,"Women are quite the fools these days." To think I ever gave my heart to you Makes me angry; but not at you. I hate myself for coming undone And having nothing to do but run. But someday you'll see It'll happen to you And you'll write the poem Of the girl who screwed you.

Fear of Garbage 15-Feb-03/10:44 PM
you lost me with the first line. your rhymes are stetched.
your metaphors are exhausted.




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