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Breeze In Spring (Free verse) by Jody Conn

Scented like a breeze in spring. This fragrant fragile flower. She pacifies and comforts me hour upon hour Shining like a summer moon An exquisite sweet bouquet I yearn to feel her kiss and touch Throughout my night and day My thoughts are always focused on The next time I may reach her To lie again at night beside This seductive lovely creature jc062001

anonymous 2-Jul-01/8:20 AM
Lose the flower/hour rhyme. Otherwise not too bad!




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