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fa11ing (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub

just before the fall the damn brittlebrown leaves, tin trees with veined fingers bloodless & burned down deep now dustchoked in the angles, the wailing and the whiteness mangled metal, papers pulped, dig bodies, x amount : obscene.

TanHand 7-Feb-03/1:36 PM
God you really were my understudy weren't you. The single word final line thing is a bit tired, don't you think? Visually this is quite good, it straddles the line between normal line breaks and image. Try to make the words more interesting. 6.




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