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I Had (Lyric) by Spindle

I had a glimmer But it died I had a truth But I lied I had a dream But it was traded away I had a hope But it wouldn't stay I had a chance But now I don't I used to try But now I won't And that's the end I have no more to say I guess I just had no idea It would all come out this way

corinacorrie 6-Feb-03/3:11 PM
Great poem! Maybe think about changing "and that's the end" since it doesn't need to rhyme, just a thought.




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